As you work on your revisions on the 14th Amendment essay, these are some of
- Topic focus needs to be on the issues of birthright citizenship and the 14th Amendment. Remember to connect your paragraphs to these specific issues, not just the broad topic of immigration.
- Still some trouble with semicolons. Refer to this review sheet and consider doing some practice exercises here.
- Parallelism, especially in the thesis statement, needs work. Review this information sheet on parallelism.
- Some of you are still really struggling on topic sentences. Once again, this review sheet offers the best information.
- Introductions were generally much improved!
- Minor issues:
- 14th Amendment is capitalized.
- Don’t quote the 14th Amendment in your piece. It feels like filler and is unnecessary.
- Make sure that your language about immigrants is appropriate.
Revisions will be due Wednesday in class for 4th, 5th, and 6th periods and Thursday in class for 3rd period.
